Friday 6 August 2010

And I be troubled, I be all worried in mind

Visit Mr.Knowitall to post your own Friday Flash 55 word story or poem! Man in phone booth

 

All he had was a crumbled photo of a unknown woman and child. Yet he was reflected in a car window, taking the picture, looking so much younger. He hesitated, then dialled the number scrawled on its back. A child answered, and screamed at his, ‘Hello,’ before the phone went dead. Then it rang back.

 

 

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30 comments:

  1. intriguing indeed! brilliant!

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  2. A fascinating tangle of webs here! Beautiful!

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  3. I would LOVE to read a sequel to this!!
    A very well written 55!

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  4. ooo...kind like momento....how scary would that be to not remember your passed other than snippets...nice 55...

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  5. Kind of cool what can be said in 55 words.

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  6. Succinct - and precise!
    a bit like life then - NOT! lol! Good one! Yes - go for the chicken thing! Great eggs and great fun!

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  7. Jeepers, wasn't expecting that end!
    Well done!

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  8. Very intriguing!! And I love your voice. A great voice for books on tape! Thanks for stopping by my blog as well.

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  9. Whew! such suspense from the very beginning. To capture that tension is a gift. I like to hear work read aloud, you and Robert Frost's Banjo have a tool I want,
    I will try it myself this weekend.
    Great reading voice, but slow down!
    Dianne

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  10. this is quite the seed for imagination. so many questions contained in so few words.

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  11. perfect.
    you make readers think for more...

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  12. That's wonderful. And great to be able to hear you reading it. I want to know more on this story!

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  13. Sometimes ' just do it' comes in very handy-nice 55 !

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  14. Wow! Great audio! Friday 55ve is going ahead by leaps and bounds!

    There is hope yet in the ringing back of the phone..

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  15. You've left oodles of mystery here. Nice one.

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  16. shivers... it's a story that begs for more, and yet stands alone in its mystery (who says every mystery has to be solved?) - masterfully written, did I say? :)

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  17. Thrill packed... Great stuff..
    Mine is here

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  18. Encore! Encore! I want to know more.,

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  19. VERY NICE 55 Mr. John.

    Reminds me a little of what it must be like to develop Alzheimer's.

    PG

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  20. Again I say NO!!
    This is perfect!
    If they want more, and it's coherent...You've done a good job!
    Excellent 55 My friend.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End....G

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  21. I love the reading, thanks for that.

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  22. Ingenious my friend. I loved listening to you and being able to read it at the same time. Well done and it was a great mystery :) Have a great Friday :)

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  23. Leaves me wanting to know more.

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  24. Oh I would LOVE to keep reading that story -- intriguing, and what a moment you captured! Brilliant stuff (as usual --)

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  25. Wonderful 55...and I *loved* hearing you read it. I think we should all do that one week, how interesting it would be to put voices to the people we've come to know through g-man's 55. Great job!! :)
    -C

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  26. They ought to make a desk top, comment
    box... so people can just stop by!
    thanks for visiting !

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  27. Okay, please tell me that's a serial story and we get to hear what happens!!

    -- a G-Man fan.

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  28. Now you cannot leave us hanging!!!
    It was great to hear you read it.

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This blog was inspired by First 50 words where you freewrite from a single word prompt. I use random words or images to create flash fiction in formats ranging from twitter postcards to short short stories.