Friday, 28 May 2010

Third date blues

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Waiting‘Thanks, black, no sugar’. Once the  kitchen door shut, Joe stripped and placed the hidden camera on the shelf. The voyeur tapes sold well. Kate was hot but tonight was business not love. Sitting down, he hesitated, wasn’t it?

Pouring the coffee over the tranquilliser, Kate thought great body, his liver alone should yield 5k.

Random Word: Caffeine

Note this has become the seed of a much longer story called Warm heart,cold hand


22 comments:

  1. oh masterful 55...ulterior motives...running rampant...lol.

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  2. Oh my word, that's just brilliant. Well done.

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  3. Yikes! Ripped from the headlines! You managed to tell a very long story in a very few words. Good job.

    Thanks for visiting my 55!

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  4. A very cool one, that. Excellent.

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  5. Too good. I love your ending.

    If fetish is the external hold and obsession is the internal hold, then they are merely opposite ends of the same rope.

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  6. Like it! I can tell it's been a full moon, some of the 55's have been very mischievous! Have an excellent weekend!

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  7. This is REALLY great...birds of a feather flock together or so they say!


    http://ramdom-short-stories.blogspot.com

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  8. Holy Toledo, John! This was bizarre and outstanding! Where did you find that photograph? Your mind is a place I wouldn't enter alone.
    I also loved your quote on steveroni's blog about the present state of man. Lovely.

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  9. awesome 55. It made me laugh out loud.

    Love your way of thinking.

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  10. ahhh the full moon is the culprit.

    now I know I need to have my coffee checked too

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  11. Maybe it's a good thing my Handpresso exploded- after this post I'd be swearin' off the coffee altogether if it weren't for the fact I'm addicted. Well done!

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  12. A 55 based on urban legend! Nicely turned, sir!

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  13. So much in these 55 words! Great job...you may want to revisit mine...I have a new one up. :)

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  14. Genius! I love 'em sick and twisted. My 55 is HERE .

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  15. Yikes... i"m staying away from her..love it

    My 55 is up

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  16. Excellent!!!

    And thanks for checking out my Flash 55!

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  17. That was purely AWESOME. Love your 55, my favourite one for today! :)

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  18. very daring and smart 55.

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  19. Your 55 was worth 5k.

    Good one.

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  20. Well...
    I believe in Karma sooooo....
    Excellent 55 John.
    Plus I see you out and about today supporting other contributors..
    Thanks a million...
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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This blog was inspired by First 50 words where you freewrite from a single word prompt. I use random words or images to create flash fiction in formats ranging from twitter postcards to short short stories.