Friday, 28 May 2010

Third date blues

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Waiting‘Thanks, black, no sugar’. Once the  kitchen door shut, Joe stripped and placed the hidden camera on the shelf. The voyeur tapes sold well. Kate was hot but tonight was business not love. Sitting down, he hesitated, wasn’t it?

Pouring the coffee over the tranquilliser, Kate thought great body, his liver alone should yield 5k.

Random Word: Caffeine

Note this has become the seed of a much longer story called Warm heart,cold hand

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22 comments:

  1. Brian Miller28 May 2010 at 12:46

    oh masterful 55...ulterior motives...running rampant...lol.

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  2. Anonymous28 May 2010 at 14:49

    Oh my word, that's just brilliant. Well done.

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  3. PattiKen28 May 2010 at 15:07

    Yikes! Ripped from the headlines! You managed to tell a very long story in a very few words. Good job.

    Thanks for visiting my 55!

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  4. anthonynorth28 May 2010 at 15:08

    A very cool one, that. Excellent.

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  5. Anonymous28 May 2010 at 15:18

    Too good. I love your ending.

    If fetish is the external hold and obsession is the internal hold, then they are merely opposite ends of the same rope.

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  6. drybottomgirl28 May 2010 at 15:19

    Like it! I can tell it's been a full moon, some of the 55's have been very mischievous! Have an excellent weekend!

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  7. RNSANE28 May 2010 at 15:47

    This is REALLY great...birds of a feather flock together or so they say!


    http://ramdom-short-stories.blogspot.com

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  8. Enchanted Oak28 May 2010 at 16:34

    Holy Toledo, John! This was bizarre and outstanding! Where did you find that photograph? Your mind is a place I wouldn't enter alone.
    I also loved your quote on steveroni's blog about the present state of man. Lovely.

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  9. A Daft Scots Lass28 May 2010 at 16:37

    awesome 55. It made me laugh out loud.

    Love your way of thinking.

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  10. moondustwriter28 May 2010 at 16:53

    ahhh the full moon is the culprit.

    now I know I need to have my coffee checked too

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  11. Anonymous28 May 2010 at 17:19

    Maybe it's a good thing my Handpresso exploded- after this post I'd be swearin' off the coffee altogether if it weren't for the fact I'm addicted. Well done!

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  12. Bubba28 May 2010 at 17:19

    A 55 based on urban legend! Nicely turned, sir!

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  13. Lulda Casadaga28 May 2010 at 17:27

    So much in these 55 words! Great job...you may want to revisit mine...I have a new one up. :)

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  14. Monkey Man28 May 2010 at 18:24

    Genius! I love 'em sick and twisted. My 55 is HERE .

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  15. Vodka Logic28 May 2010 at 22:31

    Yikes... i"m staying away from her..love it

    My 55 is up

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  16. The Silver Fox29 May 2010 at 00:48

    Excellent!!!

    And thanks for checking out my Flash 55!

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  17. Susan at Stony River29 May 2010 at 00:49

    Ummm... YIKES!!
    What a last line.

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  18. Me29 May 2010 at 00:55

    That was purely AWESOME. Love your 55, my favourite one for today! :)

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  19. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall29 May 2010 at 00:57

    very daring and smart 55.

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  20. Buzzard29 May 2010 at 01:04

    Your 55 was worth 5k.

    Good one.

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  21. G-Man29 May 2010 at 02:28

    Well...
    I believe in Karma sooooo....
    Excellent 55 John.
    Plus I see you out and about today supporting other contributors..
    Thanks a million...
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  22. Kristine29 May 2010 at 04:09

    ohhh. what a twist. love it!

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This blog was inspired by First 50 words where you freewrite from a single word prompt. I use random words or images to create flash fiction in formats ranging from twitter postcards to short short stories.

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