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The silence was the first lie and then Jo said,
'What you doing in the Holosuite later?
'Oh, I'll race my Hog across the desert under the moon.'
'What about you?', asked Ken.
'I’ll watch children play on a beach.'
They fell silent, too ashamed to see each other’s tears. Far below, the dead Earth still burned.
You manage to paint a very real and rather terrifying picture here, with great economy and few embellishments. There's both comfort and dispair in that false escape.
ReplyDeleteThanks, I try and think of these as a story you could see as a picture board story
DeleteThis is a stark frightening picture in only 55 words. And with enough plot to even please the G-Man. I love what they each say they're going to do, the futility realized in your final sentence. An all around good job.
ReplyDeleteThanks, it worked reasonably well
DeleteThat's why we should treat the Earth as precious. You summed it up beautifully.
ReplyDeleteNo where else to go!
DeleteLet's hope that there is Petrol in the desert, a hog's range is about 200 miles.
ReplyDeleteI just LOVE apocolyptic 55's
Very nicely written my friend
Thanks for playing, thanks for your great support
Have a Kick Ass Week-End
And a Happy New Year.....G
It's the holosuite so....
DeletePure awesomeness .....
ReplyDeleteAh, shucks
DeleteGreat opening line!
ReplyDeleteThanks, iits surprisingly effective
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